The Fisherman – A Collom Lune

Written for @DversePoets‘ poetry prompt on Kelly Lunes and Collom Lunes.

The sun wandered
While the moon kept watch
With heavy eyes

And the village
Bathed in the blue light
Slept in peace

The fisherman woke
Before the restless sun returned
He waited anxiously

For morning light
He walked around the silver lake
And he paced

Back and forth
Until he cried out for daylight
Again and again

But no answer
He cried out to the stars
Louder and louder

The Blue Moon
With its wisdom and love
Opened his eyes

And his arms
Gently embracing and gathering stars
He then wove

Star after star
Weaving a ribbon of light
Longer and longer

Stronger and stronger
And swiftly captured the sun
The battle won

Back in place
Daylight bled into the sky
The village slept

And the fisherman
Unaware of the moon’s sacrifice
Shielded his eyes

From the sun
For now he must wait
For the fish

By Gretchen Leary 2013


About Gretchen Venters

I am 36 years old and I live in Montana. God has set my soul on fire to serve others through writing.
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23 Responses to The Fisherman – A Collom Lune

  1. tigerbrite says:

    This form works so well in the story you have told.

  2. rebelle says:

    love this story + so universal, he could be anywhere….

  3. Grace says:

    This is such a lovely story you have spun ~ I would think children will like this story of the moon, stars, sun and fisherman ~

  4. brian miller says:

    very cool…great story telling using the form….ha we are always waiting on something…waiting on fish though is not a bad place to be…

    • Thank-you Brian πŸ™‚ I’m not sure where the story came from. Deep inside, still trying to figure out what it means to me.

      I wrote this while waiting for dinner to finish lol πŸ™‚

  5. Wonderful parable you’ve woven here, and the beauty is that you’ve made the structure of the lune almost disappear into the flow of the words.

  6. kkkkaty says:

    I really like what you did here, Gretchen; it wasn’t just another fish story:)

  7. claudia says:

    very cool how you tell a whole story with your lunes…also cool painting of the atmosphere…so much magic in it as well…

  8. Tony says:

    Lovely story-telling and imagery in your lunes. I enjoyed reading your poem.

  9. Nice work. The structure works well to drive the story.

  10. Kelvin S.M. says:

    …I almost forgot that these are lunes… Like Sam, the flow of all these made the structure of a lune almost unnoticeable… Liked the progression of the entire scene down to that last final moment of waiting for some catches… Excellent write… Smiles…

  11. rmp says:

    stunningly beautiful. it has a children’s picture book feel; I can see the illustrations takeing shape in your words.

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  13. brian miller says:

    so i am curious if i had said something out of line or what since i saw you on just about every other entry at dverse for poetics but mine…appreciate you being out there reading everyone else, i just try to keep short accounts and dont want it bugging me…

    • Oh no! I read yours! It made me think of my grandfather. But I tried to click “Post Comment” and no box appeared. I wasn’t sure it it was a setting or my phone but I just went back and the same thing happened. Is there a limit on comments? No issues, no worries. I look forward to your comments and reading your work every time! Are we doing another one today? πŸ™‚

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