Old Sun – A Poem

With steady strokes
Sweeping soft sunlight
Risen above –
a pencil thin –
Charcoal horizon
Ever. So. Slowly – I open
Those emerald eyes
To see – an old sun – set
Like a bittersweet dream
Closing them tight again
I choose to believe
In what lies ahead – –
And embrace peace.

Gretchen Leary 2013

Note to reader: It’s amazing where we find inspiration. This one came from me simply rubbing my eye with my thumb and staring at the gold glitter eye shadow and eye liner that smudged off.


About Gretchen Venters

I am 36 years old and I live in Montana. God has set my soul on fire to serve others through writing.
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27 Responses to Old Sun – A Poem

  1. janehewey says:

    really beautiful-imagery and inspiration.

  2. aprille says:

    like unwrapping a bon-bon.
    Can feel the gold wrapper and smell the truffle.

  3. Wonderful and hopeful at the end. Leaves me feeling warm inside.

  4. Wonderful Write Gretchen! I too believe in what lies ahead, embracing peace. (Love that ending! =) )

  5. brian miller says:

    nice…i like that charcoal horizon…i like too that behind those lids you see not the old sun, but a hope for what is yet to come…and in that there is always hope…smiles….

  6. Lovely, pencil thin charcoal horizon, how delicate…this reminded me of getting lost in an old painting…and there it is a smudge of eyeliner, still wonderful descriptions. 🙂

  7. hisfirefly says:

    yes! embracing with you

  8. Mary says:

    Loved your inspiration. Always a good thing to believe the future will be good, I think. The we can help make it so. Peace to you.

  9. ayala says:

    A gem of a poem, lovely!

  10. Grace says:

    I love the simplicity of the lines…and most of all the ending, embracing peace ~

  11. Gretch, a superb job. Such a melody and encouraging piece. An old sun. I’ve never written those words. Very kool. Exciting to read such fresh verse. I like and I’m inspired.

  12. ninotaziz says:

    Absolute delight inspired by the simplest things in life. How lucky you are, Gretchen to have this insight.

  13. indieflower says:

    I really like the way this sounds read aloud. Great message as well.

  14. Kelvin S.M. says:

    ….believing on things that are yet to exist is same as giving trust without weighing too much… def an absolute delight to read such a positive outlook in life Gretchen… smiles…

  15. nico says:

    I enjoyed this very much–beautiful imagery, and I share your embrace of peace. Well done!

  16. 1emeraldcity says:

    What a beautiful way to awaken…and I love your source of inspiration! Nice write :0

  17. Tony says:

    I’m sure I’ve commented on this before, but apparently not!

    Really fresh imagery in this Gretchen. Enjoyed it very much.

  18. You constantly surprise and enchant, Gretchen … I esp like: ‘Risen above – / a pencil thin – / Charcoal horizon…’ just gorgeous

  19. RL King says:

    A soft roll to this…sunbathed hope for sure.

  20. kthorpe says:

    Ok the awesomest thing about this (and there are several awesome things) is: “Old sun.” You nailed it. So evocative.

  21. Thank-you Andrea, it is the little things than can inspire the big things at times in our world 🙂

  22. Laurie Kolp says:

    Knowing your inspiration makes this all the more wonderful!

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