For dVersePoets: Poetics
Envy tastes like
Bitter paste
Spite gRiNdiNg
Behind tight
Clenched –
White teeth &
Green eyes
Take – your – finger – tip
From – my – lower – lip
For when you lie,
I bite.
Gretchen Leary 2013
This is for DversePoets where we are writing about all things green. I couldn’t think of anything other than nausea and envy and although neither of those are signs of good health, jealousy was less graphic to write about.
Gretchen Leary (McIntire) 
And rightly so.
ha…envy has a bitter taste for sure…and lies are even worse.. so a well placed bite may be not such a bad move..ha.. tightly put gretchen
This poem depicts envy spot on! Great job Gretchen 🙂
Ironically, I wrote a poem similar to this topic would you like to take a look?
http://oursunshines.wordpress.com/2013/03/15/aching-heart/
Thanks!
Brilliant depiction of envy and I love the power of the threat at the end. Penny
when you lie, i bite….whew! nice intensity in this gretchen…yikes…jealousy and envy can def be dangerous roots to let grip your heart…and make you do things you never thought you would…nice lowercaseCAPS work as well…ha….gets a bit of the craziness in it…
Haha yep! Well envy is a crazy emotion I think. Kind of ridiculous very intense and very very nasty green
Oh this one is intense. Capitalizing some of the letters in the word grinding–created a grinding feeling that carried through the whole poem. Really good.
Ouch!
Yikes on the bite and lies ~ I like the taste of bitter paste ~
Ooh, very intense and vivid and personal. Short lines work especially well. Thanks, Gretchen. k.
owwwie!! this is fantastic!!
Being green with envy can cause such pain. Tight write with a bite!
I enjoyed this, Gretchen.
Yup, envy is green.
I try not to indulge in envy…figure some are better off than I am, and I am better off than some. It is all along the continuum, I think. I just try to make the most of my own life.
I have the bitterness on my tongue. So many great lines and the bite… ouch. Amazing work!
Thank-you. I felt like I was grinding my teeth while trying to bring out the feeling which is where that line came from 🙂
Great warning !
Gretchen – few words but what intensity! really outstanding K
One certainly does need to write an opus to convey a poetic message; nice job with this verdant dusky jewel, Gretchen. Your tone matches Karin’s tonight. I stuck dab on into Ireland for my effort. Odd that one country has sent us so many immigrants who became cops, priests, and politicians that we celebrate their saint; another excuse to party green I suppose.
…i’m pretty sure i left a comment earlier here but it wasn’t here, it looked… anyhow, just so you know i like this a lot and your last 2 lines are strong enough to hit a chord… quite a reality that’s irrevocable i guess… great one.. smiles..
I had to repost it and it erased all the comments that were there 😦
We’ve all felt this strong emotion…some have taken it too far..I find this playful and yet biting;)
This is an excellent poem, precise!
Well done on the prompt for dVerse, Gretchen.
Oh, I love this. It’s a swift, clean knife wound. Such a perfect moment in time.
very well put! when you lie…I bite….loved tat line!